Words Whispered To Darkness

i like this one the most of the few you have recently posted. i think it has some great lines and good overral feel, although the flow could be improved a little still. keep it up

For once I can agree with stuh on this one! What he said!!

there will be no answer i think is the best line...

In my opinion. I THINK IT WAS WONDERFUL! I loved the way you could understand what was going on through the whole poem, i loved the way it was sad and yet hopeful. I love love loved it.

Thank you.

Just a suggestion: The line...

Some afternoon, running around,
they will make you
laugh and smile.

How about if we change that to read...

Some afternoon, running around,
kicking a soccer ball
they will make you
laugh and smile.

How do you like this arrangement?

Words spoken into a dial tone
seconds after
you fade.

Maybe you hear them,
deep in your heart.
Someday, you will know
for sure.

The phone is cold,
dead in my hand.
Void
of your Angelic voice.

I whisper the words
that I long to say
to you.

There will be no answer.
For they are spoken
to loneliness.

Some night, while you
are cold,
they will
Comfort you.

Some morning, at a
rising sun,
they will
Inspire you.

Some afternoon,
running around, (kicking a soccer ball,)
they will make you
laugh and smile.

Some evening, at a multitudinously-
hued sunset,
they will let you know
that you are never alone.

But now they
Comfort
only Darkness.
Inspire
only Silence.
Laugh
Mockingly.
Know
all that I long for.

Words spoken
to darkness
in the depths
of a lonely night.

"I Love You."