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what do you think of my poem? (edited)

 
 
Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 01:44 pm
Why can’t you see that we were meant to be?
I was my true self I when saw you in person; I did my best
It was the same person you talked to in the summer and fall of 2013
I was the one you wanted to marry
Why can’t you see it was still me?
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person
Trust me; I know better in this situation
I know it could work out more than you think so
We’re neither the perfect couple nor the worst
And no, I don’t need to find “someone better”
I ******* chose you
“60% match. We aren’t compatible.” You said
Complete. Bullshit.
We’re neither the perfect couple nor the worst
I know its not 99; I did something on okcupid to make it that high
But I do know It’s at least 87
At minimum 83
The proof I have, I can’t tell you
Because I’ll never get another chance
I know you’re confused by now, but trust me; I know better in this situation
I’m still waiting for you to see how amazing you thought I was
For you to say “I love you again.” As the real me and not as the fantasy
I must have a magical charm that only goes on when I talked to you that way
I wish you had more faith
I wish I could make you see
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person

And you only notice me when I play make believe

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fresco
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 01:50 pm
@alyssapaganproblem,
Q. What's the difference between "a poem" and "a monologue" ?
glitterbag
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 02:16 pm
@fresco,
Holy Crap, now I'm depressed.
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contrex
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 02:20 pm
Dreadful.
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knaivete
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 10:02 pm
@alyssapaganproblem,
I thoroughly enjoyed your oeuvre, redolent with angst and love.

Researching "poetic metre, foot and rhyme" will pay superlative dividends and improve any prose blogging you may contemplate.

We all learn by doing whether it's poetry or love, the important thing to remember is to move towards realistic goals. Stay in touch a.pp.
glitterbag
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 11:47 pm
@knaivete,
Wow, something actually resonated with somebody, I'm glad someone could rummage thru the crap and find some 'meaning'.
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