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what do you think of my poem?

 
 
Reply Mon 23 Feb, 2015 11:18 am
Tell me what you think whether its good or bad

Why can’t you see that we were meant to be?
I was my true self I when saw you in person; I did my best
It was the same person you talked to in the summer and fall of 2013
I was the one you wanted to marry
Why can’t you see it was still me?
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person
Trust me; I know better in this situation
I know it could work out more than you think so
“60% match. We aren’t compatible” Complete. Bullshit.
I know its not 99; I did something on okcupid to make it that high Razz
But I do know It’s at least 87
The proof I have, I can’t tell you
Because I’ll never get another chance
I know you’re confused by now, but trust me; I know better in this situation
I’m still waiting for you to see how amazing you thought I was
For you to say “I love you again.” As the real me and not as the fantasy
I must have a magical charm that only goes on when I talked to you that way
I wish you had more faith
I wish I could make you see
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person

And you only notice me when I play make believe
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glass999
 
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Reply Thu 26 Feb, 2015 04:32 am
@alyssapaganproblem,
It's quite qood, though I think it more suitable as a song of some kind maybe one relating to rap or this could be modified a little to become more song-like and some parts made into rap verses throughout.
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TaniaWilson43
 
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Reply Tue 17 Mar, 2015 04:08 am
@alyssapaganproblem,
You wrote very brilliant poem I just want to say that you did great effort and i am sure about it that you can writer more better poems.
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Michael Lalwani
 
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Reply Thu 16 Apr, 2015 05:11 am
@alyssapaganproblem,
Hello,
Good efforts.... ! Nice try.
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