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Graduation Speech Help!

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evelyncanarvon
 
Reply Tue 8 Jun, 2004 01:37 pm
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Reply Tue 8 Jun, 2004 01:54 pm
I liked it very much, Evelyn! The only things that come to my eye on this first read are:

1) that there is no Commandment II
2) That 'thy' should turn to 'thine' in front of a vowel.

I'll read a second time, though, and see if there is anything more pivotal that could do with a bit of tweaking.

--Drom.
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