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Thu 3 Jun, 2004 08:23 pm
heres my story
I'm a sucker for vampire stories, no pun intended.
lol, ok. but is it any good?
Yeah, I like it alot, but I think you need to clean up the structure. Seperate dialogue from prose, correct the spelling and grammar, and I think you're on your way! Just constructive criticism.
it was all seperated and all, the dialouge, but i copied it frum sumtin else and it messed it up
That was my second guess. It happens to me too.
i mean, its mine. all the way. but i had it on one of my webpages, and im lucky because my original copy was destroyed. thats where i copied it from.
I think it's a really cool modern vampire tale. It reminds me a bit of Buffy, the series, but darker. Good work.
lol, thanks alot. but im not gonna have a vampire slayer be a big person in this one. i wrote about one once and that was it
I can't really help ya with the constructive criticism though. Good to see you, santana. But, I'm off to bed....
its 9:10. what are you people, vampires? guess i have no reason to speak
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