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Thu 3 Jun, 2004 07:18 pm
Tears rain down your cheeks
They live brief lives
And die on your lips
Sparkling as they fall
Brief shining jewels
Sparkling as they roll
Making your cheeks shine in the moonlight
.......thoughts?
Hmm I like the concept, but the actual poem is a bit too repetetive for my liking. I think it would also help to know a little more about the scene, like why she was crying, be it happy or sad...
I wrote this just after my first boyfriend broke up with me. I found it not too long ago and wondered what others would think.