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Sat 15 May, 2004 07:12 pm
I'll probably regret ever starting this, but I was inspired by the Haiku thread. Here are the rules:
Identify a tanka as a five-line poem of 31 on in a line pattern of 5-7-5-7-7 that examines an image and responds on a personal, emotional level.
Analyze a tanka to determine its structure and intent.
Recognize that Western writers have adapted the tanka to suit the multi-syllabled words in English such that not all English tanka have the same syllable count or line count.
Understand how a poem pivots from a poetic image to a linked emotional response.
Compose two tanka, one in traditional structure and one in the non-traditional, non-restrictive form.
Well, I'm not ready for two yet, but I'll try the traditional form.
It's my wife's birthday
she is not home with me now,
but I am not sad
our dog personifies love
infecuating all three
Like the Haiku game, just start with the last line, but make sure it's emotional!
Ay, ay ay, It' Saturday Night and too many Margs, but okay, (I can't absorb all your rules, but:)
5-7-5-7-7
Infecuating all three...
Infecutaing- what the?
Yes I looked it up.
Dictionary doesn't list.
I feel inferior now..
Well, I'm willing to just go with the simple 5-7-5-7-7 structure for now. The instructions were actually taken from a Japanese educational site on how to teach the composition of Tanka to students. I was fascinated.
Oh, yes, I made up 'infecuating'.
cav
Love to participate, but something about the NUMBERS thing tells me I shouldn't. I was one of the very few that got the Haiku rhythm wrong.
For everyone else it was a breeze!
I'm just not good with formulas at all. Just call me remedial.
Good luck, anyway!
"composition of Tanka"
(I will look that up Monday!!)
I just realized... if you end with with seven syllables, how can I begin with five??
Hot still muggy night
Summer seems to come too soon
Cat on window sill
Listening to night's creatures
Move on feet that I can't hear
Great idea Cav!
fealola wrote:"composition of Tanka"
(I will look that up Monday!!)
I just realized... if you end with with seven syllables, how can I begin with five??
Dang, good point. We could make this a free-form game, or attempt to break up the last 7 syllable line to make 5, and 2 starters for the second line. Thoughts?
oh dang, it's a cyclic system.... maybe we can use the last 5-syl line for the first line of the new poem?
Like I said, I've had a few margaritas, but willing to go along...
Lemme try this out...this is as new to me as to everyone else...
From littlek's post:
Move on feet, that I
can't hear for the crumbling of
the leaves beneath them.
Sad feet, so tired of running
from mother natures cruel kiss.
Okay, this can work.
So, let's break up the first 7 syllable line then, to incorporate it into a new poem. Quite the challenge.
5-7-5-7-7
from mother natures
cruel kiss, we recoil and hide
through the wet, dark, woods
we run from the feral sounds
looking for sanctuary.
(like that??)
Oh that's good, fealola. I refuse to follow up however.
Remember, the free-form option is always open, as long as the syllables add up to 31.
(hmm. maybe we should use any part of the last line to begin the next, like:
For sanctuary
instead of:
Lokking for sanctu.
This is great, thank you for starting it; I will add confusion, and you will all rejoice in it by throwing sighs at me.
How about any part of any of the three sevens?
The feral sounds leap
in cry to the hungry sky.
Let me not take in
the stress right now at mid night
but curl abed in full flight.
Sanctuary calls
A dry cool whisper from a
shaded green eden
The sound of water falling
Into a clear rocky pool
damn!
To the hungry sky
the fledgling takes to the breeze
one eye on the nest
one eye on infinity
Mother watches quietly
Stumble It!
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