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Crash Test Dummy

 
 
chizzy
 
Reply Wed 7 Apr, 2004 03:49 am
Crash Test Dummy

Opened a black box tonight
Found memories i wish i had lost
And now that Pandora’s box is open
It wont be closed again
Can’t save my heart
From my past and pain

As I recall your face
And remember my dreams
I Hear the echoes
Of what you whispered
When you held your tongue

Crash test dummy
I don’t care if you break down
Fine if you fall apart
You’re just my
Crash test dummy
I will get a second chance

I see you smile at her
Feel your satisfaction
A feeling new to me
The love and care you offer
Has never been in my reach

Crash test dummy
I don’t care if you break down
Fine if you fall apart
You’re just my
Crash test dummy
Now i’ve got my second chance

And oh I hope you’ve learned
From my crashes and my tears
Wish you’ve understood
This way it will never work
And i pray for her sake
Your next attempt you’re in for real

Crash test dummy
So you broke down - fell apart
It s okay ‘cause
You were just my
Crash test dummy
And i got my second chance

Silly me
To think time would heal the wounds
The hurt never faded
And the scars remained
I’ll bare them with pride
Like the crushed test dummy
From your first test ride

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i wrote this one last week and i would like to hear what you think of it... i'm not really satisfied with it yet, so any suggestions are welcome!

it is about my father, our relation is pretty f*cked up sometimes, as you might have noticed...
and, in a way, it's about my half-sister who is now 3 years old
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doglover
 
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Reply Wed 7 Apr, 2004 03:50 pm
Wow! I think your poem is very moving. Your pain and loss really comes through. I'm not into writing, so I don't feel qualified to advise you on any changes you should make to it. To me, it's perfect just the way it is.
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McVanish
 
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Reply Thu 8 Apr, 2004 02:00 am
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... (speachless...)
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chizzy
 
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Reply Sat 10 Apr, 2004 01:06 am
wow, thank you Embarrassed
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