A poem I wrote about my cat

Ats great kid. I want to use it as a wall hanging (I will, of course change the name cause PATCHES is not my wifes cats name

Having written a couple myself, allow me to point out a a couple of grammatical/semantic errors which IMO detract from the literary level which the use of the words like "hedonism" and "bestow" aspires.

"Fell" should be "fallen".
"Laying" should be "lying".

But keep up the good work !

how you rule
by voguing hedonic

(Hows that fresco, any better ?) cause Im gonna steal this poem I think its a great effort. I had a student who used to answer tests in rhyme. The kid was brilliant and a wiseass at the same time. But I hadda give it full credit
And she always finished in time

Rhyme !...now you're at least talking structure !

Don't get me wrong. I've got nothing against stringing a few interesting thoughts together and calling it "poetry". But I know from experience the real challenge is to express your thoughts within a set of stylistic rules which enhances the transmission.

You may remember this one from some time ago in which I was experimenting with sonnet form after a visit to Salzburg.

The Sound Of Music2003

The streets of Salzburg resonate
With multi Mozart revelry
By every arch and rustic gate
Play international minstrelsy.

And soon the von Trapp tour appears
Our jolly ladies sing-a-long
"Ah look ! That's where the little dears
Performed their Madel icing song !"

Yet just beyond these charming scenes
Was Hitler's wartime Adler lair
And coaches seeking darker dreams
Depart to fog the alpine air.

And Wagner down the mountain rolls
To crush the tongues of sweeter souls.

Interesting thoughts (more or less) expressed with odd punctuation and variable lengths of line are a sure winner.

...sure to be called "poetry, you mean ?

Well, yes.

Alas - agreed.

I'm no poetry smartie but I take it that poetry has years ago moved from always being about rhyme or meter or strict structure.

I like this one.

haiku confuses me
it sometimes doesn't make sense
please pass the pliers

I'm glad you like it but I appreciate if you didn't use it.

What's not to like ? I am merely suggesting that there is "poetry" and "poetry" just there is "music" and "music". It's not so much about "moving on" as about inevitable decline in levels of originality, intricacy, effort and care in construction.

I like both in a lot of the arts.

Took me quite a while to make room for concept art in my brain and eyes.
My first date with my later husband - we went with a friend of mine, a chemist and a painter, to a conceptual art show she knew about at the then new LAICA museum in LA, called Clay Works in Progress. Funny how I remember the title..

Any, it was a giant circle of clay, and the progress was that it would crack over the time of the installation, let's say three months.
I thought I'd never seen anything so stupid....
I've mellowed a bit over time.

I love it!

Sorry you posted it. Its in the public domain now. Ill at least give you an attribute

Im thinking of those few changes nd to make calligraphy and frame it.

Yes. There's a fine line between "mellowing" and falling in with "The Emperor's New Clothes " con.

I am avoiding visits to art museums with ossobuco. I usually fall into "The Emperor's New Closthes" school of thought.

I really love the "respect" you have towards my wishes