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Poem that came to me while I was in the shower.

 
 
Reply Sun 15 Feb, 2004 09:25 pm
Where there was God so was I,
Searching for meaning,
Unable to find, Sad
Emptiness I felt,
Swarming inside,
Goddamn my soul!
Why take this useless prize?,
All the things I couldn't say,
I held inside until the day,
Until the day..I lost my faith,

Oh faithless day,
How you came and went,
Too early for approval,
Too late for consent,
But came you did,
And planed to stay,
My heart did bleed,
On this faithless day,

Useless emotions,
And my useless self,
Wanting isolation,
But screaming for help,

What can you feel when you're emotionally dead?
One screaming bullet coming towards your head,
Suicide is something, I'd never do,
But I'd find it easy to kill all of you. Twisted Evil



So what do you think of my lighthearted poem? :wink:
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theollady
 
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Reply Sun 15 Feb, 2004 09:42 pm
I cant find it lighthearted at all, Cof theL.

A bit heavy,
and is it surprising YOU to see these thoughts crowding in on you?? Often my own astound me.

Incidentally- your writing style and coordination are very good.
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Child of the Light
 
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Reply Sun 15 Feb, 2004 09:50 pm
Does it suprise me? Nah, I know who I am. And thanks for the compliment... Very Happy
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Individual
 
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Reply Sun 15 Feb, 2004 11:33 pm
Somehow, your avatar completes the picture.
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farmerman
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 06:54 am
i have several battalions of artillery at my disposal, so should you be so inclined to act on your shower fantasies, think again,
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Child of the Light
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:47 pm
farmerman wrote:
i have several battalions of artillery at my disposal, so should you be so inclined to act on your shower fantasies, think again,


I'm more of a medieval warfare kind of guy. You build your castle and I'll man my trebuchets. Sell your several battalions of artillery and buy heavy calvary, and bowman. I'll round together a few Mangudai, and battering rams....Then, we will have something. Also, killing people is only the beginning of my "shower fantasies"...
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Individual
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:50 pm
Hey, let's keep this R rated, child.
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Child of the Light
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:55 pm
Individual wrote:
Hey, let's keep this R rated, child.


Medieval warfare can be VERY BLOODY....Haven't you seen Braveheart?

And my other shower fantasy is sex, which always merits the R.
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cjhsa
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:55 pm
CotL, that is the most dramatic change of avatar I've ever seen.
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Child of the Light
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:56 pm
Indeed, I love the extremes..
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cjhsa
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:56 pm
And somehow disturbing...
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Individual
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 03:58 pm
I was going to put G put then I thought about the warfare. And I'm sure your shower fantasies go way beyond R.
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Child of the Light
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 04:01 pm
XXX

Usually anyway..
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Individual
 
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Reply Mon 16 Feb, 2004 04:05 pm
I prefer Dos Equiis myself.
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