Reply Sun 8 Dec, 2002 12:16 pm
if I forget all the hands
that touched this
worn and tender flesh
and you block out all
the breasts where you
have sought to rest
we could dim the lights
pull up the sheets
and be as virgins yet


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dupre
 
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Reply Mon 9 Dec, 2002 11:19 am
Cute. Nice assonance with "forGET" "flesh" "breasts" "rest" and "yet." It really flows. This would make a great pick-up line in a bar filled with people who've been around the block a few times, more politely known as "experienced." LOL!
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jjorge
 
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Reply Mon 9 Dec, 2002 07:06 pm
Nice
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ehBeth
 
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Reply Mon 9 Dec, 2002 07:28 pm
Truly sweet and kind.
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mikey
 
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Reply Mon 9 Dec, 2002 08:47 pm
innocence renewed, deep, warm, tender. comfortable and soothing to read sweetpea.
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