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A prayer

 
 
joe1949
 
Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2004 04:42 pm
Laughing

The cold wind in the sky
I would say Summer past us by
With man's best friend we must descend
As the sun goes down,

I see the lights of our old town.
Look Grandad see that star
Look so close yet so far
Look Jim do you see the one you cannot miss.

That's your Gran, she's blowing you a kiss
You see son, since your Gran past away,
Your company has made me happy
I'm glad you've come to stay.

Grandad I love my Mother and Father to
But the happy'ist day is spent with you
When I grow up I hope the people will say
Gets like his Grandfather everyday.

So Grandad when you go to your bed at night
Say your prayers and I will come in and put out the light.
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edgarblythe
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2004 07:13 pm
I am not a religious man, but I can appreciate the way you've constructed your poem. Aside from a few grammatical errors it is well written and engaging.
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joe1949
 
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Reply Fri 23 Jan, 2004 03:00 pm
thanks just started writing and have a few things to learn yet.
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