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Sun 4 Jan, 2004 06:16 pm
Where do you hide your halo?
& Where do you have your wings
I know that you're an angel
Disguised as many things
Cause you are so remarkable
& You do fantastic things
I know that you're an angel
Where do you hide you're wings
I've seen what you can do
Look what you've done with me
I have become a better man
& I want the world to see
The beauty that you have
& The love you always bring
I know that you're an angel
Where do you hide your wings?
Sweet poetry, very song-like!
hey Mister,
That was very good.
Great! The rhyming seemed very natural.
MisterEthoughts,
we are WITH you....
quite a few of us have those people who seem to have 'wings' hidden because of their angelic qualities. Your recognition of this in poetry is very touching. Thanks.
Personally I think that when showcasing writing grammar and spelling are important.
But beyond that what I'd do is reserve the last line for the end, I think it's a great ending dilluted through its earlier use.
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