my first rap

Reply Thu 3 Feb, 2011 08:01 pm
im frustrated so listen up hoes im bout to get mad and busta niggas nose.take ya time dont matter to me stutter til it hurts while i freestyle freely.u mutha fuc*az think u can beat me, the last nigga i just left lookin really fuc*in silly.
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Arella Mae
Reply Thu 3 Feb, 2011 08:09 pm
You might call that rap but don't call it music. I call it filth.And before you say a thing to me about it, if you didn't want an honest answer then you never should posted it.
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Reply Tue 1 Mar, 2011 11:14 pm
Here's the thing: the best rap is supposed to be profound. The word choice is clever, the lines are thoughtful, each phrase has meaning that makes you think a little bit about it. Look at other rappers and how they come up with spectacular lines - like Lil' Wayne's "I hate to see her go, but I love to watch her leave" or Drake's "I took some sense and made a nickel of it."

Your rap doesn't look very thoughtful. You're trying to be all gangster and hoodlum by saying "****" and "nigga" a lot. But your lines are pretty generic - anyone putting in a little concentration could come up with your rhymes. I suggest you do some more research about how professionals put together raps.
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