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Some Lyrics half way finished

 
 
Reply Thu 11 Dec, 2003 05:45 am
here's the first one, I haven't thought of a title and i'm waiting for the restof the verses to come to me:

Throught the curtains the light greets me
Upon my new awakening
And like birth I feel scared and sore
They pulled me out when I was premature
But I'm not scared to faced the day
I just can't get past all the pain

I try to sleep my life away
And all my broken yesterdays
But my distorted body
Always hurts in the morning

Here's the second, once again no title and waiting on the rest of the verses:
(the song's about war and hard times in general, i want to go on about further political unimportance and manipulation and epistemology)

The protesters keep on marching
But the troops keep embarking
And nothing stops the pain
They're dying all in vain
We've seen it all before
The dead and bloodied corpse
Oh - just lies in the rain
What will you say?

And another one, same deal as before:

Windows laden with spider webs
Distract as the day passes by
Like so many time and time before
Yet it's like nothing instead
Drifting until unimportant (or inevitable) night
Feeling nothing as I stare at the floor

Can I be saved (x2)
Can you redeem me (?)
I can't feel you anymore
I think I'm dead inside

One more, again the same deal:

I hate - to say
That I - am only alive
With you - in view
Rest of the time - I'm searching my mind
For the truth - of you
And your holding - of me

That's all I'm gonna post for now, tell me what you think of 'em.
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Reply Thu 11 Dec, 2003 05:53 am
Nuggets and fragments of unfinished songs litter the landscape... just look at my hard drive.

You're doing the right thing, though. Get 'em out, get feedback. Let 'em stew for awhile and ferment, and maybe you'll come back to 'em.

These are mostly mood pieces, no? So you have to re-create or re-acquire the mood you were in when you started, otherwise the song is disjointed.

Do you have tunes in mind?
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