Shamiel

Sun:
You saw my criticisms and comments on the last board. Since then it had cleaned up nicely. I'm still having problems with the prosetry, but that's just because I'm too lazy to appreciate it fully. If i'm reading a story I like it to be escapist, as I already have enough work to do lol. But all in all I think you are doing a bang up job with this one.

Thank you so much GoshisDead I thought I should force down some roots lest I fly away.
It is soothing to know you are still watching.
Thanks.
More to come if this goes well.

Beautiful, Sometime.... I noticed you can read it backwards.

Shhh that was supposed to be a surprise.
Perpetual motion baby.
The final edit will take care of it all.
I wish you had read the thread back 'there'.
I've got most of it if you ever still want it.
Great to see you.

This will be the last of my stuff 'here' from the negative responses it has been getting. (sad sun)

Will hook you and GoshisDead up with the forum I will be posting my writings.

very captivating-i rather like both of them though...there are things in the first that got lost...a little i think...and the second can be even more refined. the first is more like a memory, a recount of a tale of something that happened in prehistory that had been told and retold...the second, more like a poem but not necessarily a reflection of history, yet still a truth...

what other place you post stuff???