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"Notes" original poem

 
 
jjorge
 
Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 02:52 am
'Notes'

Last night I thought about those notes,
you know (well, you don't really)
notes for you that I keep writing,
notes you've never seen.

It made me think of birds --I mean
those birds that sing their mating songs--
do they keep singing? ... even
though the thing went wrong?

Does a bird keep doing, doing,
even knowing he won't do?
does he just continue singing,
does he stop, and fly away,
or does he have another way to muddle through?

In an empty place, his notes are ringing,
far from her his lonely call,
softly, slowly, sadly, singing,
perhaps he's been there all along.
-jjorge
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edgarblythe
 
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Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 05:34 am
Someone needs a hug. Not a manly hug from me; a hug, nevertheless.
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Eva
 
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Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 09:47 am
C'mere, jjorge.....((((((((((HUG))))))))))

Good to have you back!
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jjorge
 
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Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 09:16 pm
Hi Edgar! Hi Eva!

Despite the mood of the poem I'm doing ok really.

I wrote most of it during a walk in the woods back in July. That's when I was writing all my JD poems and dealing with the realization that my crush on her was unrequited.
http://www.able2know.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=9261

As I said on another thread, my 'Dean duties' and
hunting for a new house have consumed most of my time lately.

It's hard to stay away from A2K though....
....... such a nice group of people!
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edgarblythe
 
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Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 09:18 pm
Greetings from a Dean people.
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jjorge
 
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Reply Mon 17 Nov, 2003 09:25 pm
Greetings Edgar. I'm one too.
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