Reply Fri 24 Oct, 2008 08:05 pm
"Meditation in the Park"

Sunlight plays on leaves.
Water whispers gently by.
My leg is asleep.

--TickTockMan

Anyone else have their own Haiku to contribute? I always liked the necessity of trying to condense an idea to a 17 syllable (5,7,5) structure. Plus it doesn't have to rhyme. Which is nice.
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Brian phil
 
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Reply Fri 24 Oct, 2008 09:59 pm
@TickTockMan,
Heidi Klum is Hot

Married, though, so matters not.

Fantasy, my lot.


Hey, not only 5-7-5 syllabic structure, but it even rhymes! Ah, though not entirely based on the Japanese haiku themes. Smile
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Theaetetus
 
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Reply Fri 24 Oct, 2008 10:24 pm
@TickTockMan,
Reminiscence

Old man contemplates
Memories of youthful days
New souls are reborn
VideCorSpoon
 
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Reply Sat 25 Oct, 2008 05:34 pm
@Theaetetus,
Haikus are easy
But sometimes they don't make sense
Refrigerator...
Theaetetus
 
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Reply Sat 25 Oct, 2008 10:33 pm
@VideCorSpoon,
VideCorSpoon wrote:
Haikus are easy
But sometimes they don't make sense
Refrigerator...


This is actually an obvious sort of model for a haiku. So I congratulate you for giving a near perfect model for what a haiku should kind of resemble.
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Theaetetus
 
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Reply Sat 25 Oct, 2008 10:35 pm
@TickTockMan,
Complacence

Passive people pray
Bleating like a herd of sheep
Silly human tricks
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Catchabula
 
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Reply Tue 15 Sep, 2009 09:21 am
@TickTockMan,
Just found this tread. Did I drop the following somewhere before? They're a bit too short for the cw-section ;-)


Three haikus


The moon in winter.
My loneliness blossoms red
Like blood on the snow.


The sound of spring rain.
My kisses rain on her skin.
Why is she crying?


The tales in old books
And memories of time passed
Suffice an old man.
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Caroline
 
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Reply Tue 15 Sep, 2009 09:30 am
@TickTockMan,
Who wrote this? Why is she crying? It's beautiful.

---------- Post added 09-15-2009 at 10:38 AM ----------

I think I'll leave it to my imagination, thanks.:flowers:
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Catchabula
 
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Reply Tue 15 Sep, 2009 09:39 am
@TickTockMan,
Tough questions are asked.
The master smiles in his beard.
He hears but chipmunks.

;-)
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Darkpoet
 
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2009 08:14 am
@TickTockMan,
TickTockMan;29288 wrote:
"Meditation in the Park"

Sunlight plays on leaves.
Water whispers gently by.
My leg is asleep.

--TickTockMan



I almost lolled at the last verse. Very nice, I would have thought the last verse was random, then I thought of it and it made sense! hehe..

I die in that path
Where my lowly soul ascends
There it left a rose

another:):

I gaze at your eyes
I smiled with uplifting bliss,
Because I love thee
Dave Allen
 
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2009 09:48 am
@TickTockMan,
HAIKU
To express oneself
in seventeen syllables
is very diffic
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Catchabula
 
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2009 10:19 am
@Darkpoet,
Darkpoet;91845 wrote:
I almost lolled at the last verse. Very nice, I would have thought the last verse was random, then I thought of it and it made sense! hehe..


This means that Tick-Tock's haiku is the most japanese of all! If a koan can bring the Zen-adept to Satori, why shouldn't a haiku be able to do that? In fact a haiku is often a koan in a strict conventional form. We do the wrong thing with haiku's if we try to express our western romantic sensibility in them. Take these from Matsuo Basho, often small gems of meditation:

Silent and still; then
Even sinking into the rocks,
The cicada's screech.

The greatest not to say the only haikus have always that unexpected twist, in spite of the rigid form. Like the koan they are a RIDDLE, a question, clearing and cleaning our sight. Is this still poetry? :

You watch - it's clouded,
You don't watch, and it's clear,
When you view the moon.
(Miura Chora)

If it's not poetry it's philosophy. More by less is the challenge of the haiku. The best take ten years to ripen ;-) . Bonne chance!


---------- Post added 09-19-2009 at 06:41 PM ----------

I couldn't resist adding this interesting vid:


YouTube - Komuso Zen Priest Playing Shakuhachi

In the town's hussle-bussle
He plays the shakugachi,
Alone in the crowd.
.
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GoshisDead
 
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2009 11:37 am
@VideCorSpoon,
VideCorSpoon;29403 wrote:
Haikus are easy
But sometimes they don't make sense
Refrigerator...

That has been my favorite haiku for years.
Catchabula
 
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2009 12:49 pm
@GoshisDead,
Because it is not insulting? :bigsmile:
chad3006
 
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Reply Tue 22 Sep, 2009 08:00 am
@Catchabula,
look at my garden
the fence has a hole in it
goats eat my garden
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TickTockMan
 
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Reply Tue 22 Sep, 2009 12:44 pm
@TickTockMan,
Meditation #4

Fish swim belly up
Birds drown in the sky above
Some good comes of it.


~TTM~
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Pangloss
 
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Reply Tue 22 Sep, 2009 03:47 pm
@TickTockMan,
Green leaves turn to red
Rising; the cool, swirling breeze
Soft autumn showers
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Adam101
 
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Reply Sat 3 Oct, 2009 12:36 am
@TickTockMan,
My shoulder to stone,
I feel that I know I am
A man with purpose.
Arjuna
 
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Reply Sat 3 Oct, 2009 10:18 am
@Adam101,
Closed eyes, tiny breaths
he holds my thumb in his hand
little bald angel
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rhinogrey
 
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Reply Sat 3 Oct, 2009 04:04 pm
@TickTockMan,
I am a contradic
tion in death create I life
am the opposite
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