Pride or Humility?

Hey, Holiday, you have a flare for this! A sort of mad prose poem, very cool.

I am curious about the motivation of Chris. Or maybe his motivation is supposed to be ambiguous, that we should only know that the motive is pride?

Chris = pride , Christine = humility

I like it! It is rather experimental and that is often the poetry that I tend to prefer. If I was you I would revise the poem a bit, and then maybe try to go into a little more depth. It just feels like it is missing something.

Right, I can see the pride in Chris, but what has sparked this extreme prideful reaction in him, especially if Christine is possessed of such humility? I wouldn't answer the question directly in the piece, but some hint at the cause might be a good addition.

Overall, though, I like it.

That would have been a good idea, thankyou.