Reply Wed 5 Dec, 2007 08:12 am
Today I bid goodbye to a long known and dear friend
I hope I will never see you again
I will see you with others, you are still their friend,
but I will never be your friend again
There is only one true friend
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NeitherExtreme
 
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Reply Wed 5 Dec, 2007 02:11 pm
@cjames phil,
I really enjoyed that one. Smile I'm not much of a poetry guy by nature, but that was short and thought provoking. I read through the first lines quickly, but did a double take and read it more slowly (and meaningfully) as soon as I read the final line...
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cjames phil
 
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Reply Wed 5 Dec, 2007 02:36 pm
@cjames phil,
Thanks! I am by no chance a poetry guy either, but I do enjoy writing some small ones from time to time.
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NeitherExtreme
 
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Reply Thu 6 Dec, 2007 06:48 pm
@cjames phil,
I'm curious, does this poem have a specific meaning to you that you would be willing to share? I like it more every time I read it...
Fido
 
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Reply Thu 6 Dec, 2007 07:54 pm
@cjames phil,
cjames wrote:
Today I bid goodbye to a long known and dear friend
I hope I will never see you again
I will see you with others, you are still their friend,
but I will never be your friend again
There is only one true friend


I went down to the rivers edge
and stomped my feet in mud
and as I watched that river flow
I dreamed it was your blood
the mud I felt between my toes
I dreamed it was your guts
and as I watched that river flow
I dreamed it was your blood

A sanguine moon did slowly rise
upon the bloody tide
my head sank down upon my chest
I closed my tired eyes
I felt my hands upon your throat
my blade began to slide
I heard your woman scream her grief
I felt your heart beside

Dear days were those my weary friend
when I could plot your bloody end
One question waits before us then
shall we have peace
or will I let the furies in?
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cjames phil
 
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Reply Fri 7 Dec, 2007 05:44 am
@NeitherExtreme,
NeitherExtreme wrote:
I'm curious, does this poem have a specific meaning to you that you would be willing to share? I like it more every time I read it...


It does indeed. I wrote it to my ego.
NeitherExtreme
 
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Reply Tue 11 Dec, 2007 02:15 pm
@cjames phil,
cjames wrote:
It does indeed. I wrote it to my ego.

That's pretty much what it meant to me too. Smile Not to pry, but was their specific meaning behind the "one true friend"?
cjames phil
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 09:22 am
@NeitherExtreme,
NeitherExtreme;6754 wrote:
That's pretty much what it meant to me too. Smile Not to pry, but was their specific meaning behind the "one true friend"?


Hehe that is pretty much up the individual person to decide Wink
NeitherExtreme
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 09:29 am
@cjames phil,
cjames wrote:
Hehe that is pretty much up the individual person to decide Wink

Sounds reasonable to me. Smile
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Fido
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 11:44 am
@cjames phil,
cjames wrote:
Hehe that is pretty much up the individual person to decide Wink


Not a poem, really. More like a guessing game. Lucky he's not dead so you can still ask.
cjames phil
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 01:19 pm
@Fido,
When did poems not become a guessing game? Razz
Fido
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 03:39 pm
@cjames phil,
cjames wrote:
When did poems not become a guessing game? Razz

Recently, apparently.
Fido
 
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Reply Wed 12 Dec, 2007 03:54 pm
@Fido,
This is my art
shiny, bold and dark
Challenging, egrossing, and stark
This coin keep I close to my heart
this is my question mark

It is entitled: this is a question mark
and here I strike a spark
that for a lark the people hark
unto my question mark
and why for laughter poets fart.
This is my question mark
Fido
 
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Reply Thu 13 Dec, 2007 05:34 pm
@Fido,
Fido wrote:


This is my art
shiny, bold and dark
Challenging, egrossing, and stark
This coin keep I close to my heart
this is my question mark

It is entitled: this is a question mark
and here I strike a spark
that for a lark the people hark
unto my question mark
and why for laughter poets fart.
This is my question mark

This is my art
this is my question mark
of hope it is the ark
of fear it is the shark
of hate it is the dark
of death it is the bark
this is my question mark.



Thangufordainspiration
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Fido
 
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Reply Tue 26 Feb, 2008 06:39 am
@cjames phil,
Monkey Talk, by Fido

Ooo Ooo Oooo
Aah aah aah aah
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prolix
 
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Reply Wed 27 Feb, 2008 05:26 pm
@cjames phil,
I don't like poetry. However I like that your poem is short =). I'm not going to judge it or tell tell whether I like it or not. I just wanted you to know that I read it, if that means anything to you Very Happy.
Fido
 
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Reply Wed 27 Feb, 2008 05:51 pm
@prolix,
prolix wrote:
I don't like poetry. However I like that your poem is short =). I'm not going to judge it or tell tell whether I like it or not. I just wanted you to know that I read it, if that means anything to you Very Happy.

Everything means nothing to me, and I am trying to get over it.
Casualty
 
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Reply Mon 17 Mar, 2008 12:12 pm
@Fido,
This should help... *Sarcasm* Very Happy

"From Fear To Hell"

I hate the sun,
I hate the ocean,
I hate the very best.
I hate Your glory,
I hate devotion,
I hate this bitter test.
We faught till tears had streamed -the eyes too weak to see the day.
I gave my heart to do Your Will but it got in the way.
I hate my hopes,
I hate my dreams,
I hate Your gentle nudge.
I hate my joy,
I hate my peace,
I hate the way You love.
And all is tears for all my fears are coming to me true,
Though the while You laugh and smile -all want replaced by You.
Justice mocks and locks my hands full measure in their pace,
The way I am will testify -my lamp torn from its place.
It is the way I am -but hope, the lamb has paid for man.
Though some may stand and shine,
Most brilliantly...
There are those who's ending sad -denied;
For all their clever masks -they died,
Choosing death on the inside,
Like me... Very Happy
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