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Sat 25 Oct, 2003 11:26 pm
Fallen once more, into consensual disgrace...
Gave herself to a man who only takes,
When the one he desires denies him a place.
You know the one he's compelled to chase,
Elusive dream, with perfection's face?
Well they both know that will never be her...
Before it began, she lost that race.
So he uses her, loses her...what difference does it make?
She uses him, loses herself, ignoring what's at stake.
There is no kiss, they just get it done.
She pretends it's love,
Then drives herself home.
Ouch...
The emotion pours from your words, Kirsten. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. Please come back and share some more when you have time. Welcome to A2K!
Impressive rhyme scheme, raw emotions... nicely done.
I espcially like how the hard A rhyme gives way to the soft O rhyme at the end. Conveys anger-to-resignation.
I agree with everyone, full of emotion, nice work.