Whats a non or less vulgar replacement for the phrase: "Revenge F~ck"?

Forums: Screenwriting, English, Literature, Words, Writing
Email this Topic • Print this Page

I'm a screenwriter working on a line in a PG13 script. What I want to say is: "Actually, I’d love to revenge **** a whole train of guys. " But I need it to be PG13. So how can I say it without ****?

Topic Stats
Top Replies
Link to this Topic

Type: Question • Score: 6 • Views: 4,137 • Replies: 40

[+4] - engineer - 10/12/2009I think the real problem is that if you express the sentiment correctly, I don't see how whatever you say will be PG-13. All the talk arounds still come up R.

@Muarck,

screw?

1 Reply

how about a revenge shtup?

1 Reply

@Region Philbis,

My problem is revenge screw just sounds like I was trying to replace **** with screw. So it really doesn't sound like realistic dialog.

0 Replies

@Gala,

Yeah, and I thought about shtup too! I like the word, but I think it comes down to the same problem. It sounds like I'm trying to replace **** with something else. And therefore ends up sounding kind of fake.

2 Replies

@Muarck,

Actually, I’d love to revenge shag a whole train of guys.

0 Replies

@Muarck,

One thing I tried is:

"Actually, I could bang a whole train of guys just for a little revenge."

To me that sounded mostly realistic and had almost the punch of:

"Actually, I’d love to revenge **** a whole train of guys. "

But I still didn't think it was quite good enough.
Unfortunately, I do think the solution will have to be something like that though. Not a one to one word substitution, but an entire re-write of the sentence.

2 Replies

@Muarck,

it'll sound fake no matter what word you come up with -- ain't nothin' like the real thing...

bang?

1 Reply

@Muarck,

This character doesn't sound particularly classy. Is that a fair assessment?

1 Reply

@Region Philbis,

I disagree actually. That's not always true. A while ago I was on here trying to work out another phrase. The original was: "You're a fucked up coach ******* up our students." I substituted: "You're a washed up coach, burning out our students." And I honestly think the G version is better. Took forever to think of though. This time though, I think the solution won't be as simple as replacing two words, I think it will require re-writing the original phrase.

1 Reply

@tsarstepan,

Actually, the character is quite classy, but at the same time really upfront, and currently going through a terrible divorce.

0 Replies

Actually, a retaliation bang of every guy on a train might make me feel better.

Bang, train... kind of rhymes.

2 Replies

@boomerang,

Not train as in choo choo train, but train as in queue. ;-)

1 Reply

@Robert Gentel,

Thanks! I've not heard that expression before.

Okay. Change my "on" to "in".

0 Replies

@Muarck,

I read Carcaterra's Sleepers recently (now there's a book..). I'll do a skim and see if I can pick up anything useful there. He had some graphic scenes that read true but I don't think he splattered language around in a gross manner.

Anyway, interesting question. I'll think on it.

1 Reply

@ossobuco,

Didn't see Boomer's post. That sounded fine. Or, fine enough.

0 Replies

@Muarck,

Muarck wrote:

One thing I tried is:

"Actually, I could bang a whole train of guys just for a little revenge."

To me that sounded mostly realistic and had almost the punch of:

"Actually, I’d love to revenge **** a whole train of guys. "

But I still didn't think it was quite good enough.

How about: "I'd like to make babies with a large and random assortment of gentlemen as a means of expressing my desire to gain some measure of satisfaction at your resulting distress."

Really, I think "I could bang a whole train of guys just for a little revenge" is just as offensive as the original. Just because you don't use the word "****" in your alternative doesn't mean it doesn't conjure up the same image.

0 Replies

@boomerang,

boomerang wrote:

Actually, a retaliation bang of every guy on a train might make me feel better.

How you doin'?

http://marcel-marchon.com/img--117945132--Chicago-El-train--m.jpg

0 Replies

@Muarck,

I think the real problem is that if you express the sentiment correctly, I don't see how whatever you say will be PG-13. All the talk arounds still come up R.

1 Reply

@engineer,

Yeh, I agree with that.

Punt to another concept.. it is, after all, a throwaway line, not the story line. (I was married to a screenwriter.)

Is there room for humor?

0 Replies

Whats a non or less vulgar replacement for the phrase: "Revenge F~ck"?

Related Topics

Quick Links

My Account

able2know