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Whats a non or less vulgar replacement for the phrase: "Revenge F~ck"?

 
 
CalamityJane
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 05:27 pm
As the mother of a 14 year old, I'd like to see a more refined language in movies.
It's a sad affaire when a screen writer has to wreck his brain to find a replacement for "****" .

Revenge **** is an oxymoron in my book, as the word revenge in itself
stipulates "getting the better of someone" or "get fucked over".
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Diest TKO
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 06:53 pm
Is the character a man or woman? Is the line supposed to be comical or spiteful? I think this information could help.

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tsarstepan
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 06:55 pm
@Diest TKO,
I ascertained it was a she and seemingly in a spiteful mood.
Diest TKO
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 07:00 pm
@tsarstepan,
Thanks tsar!

Is she seeking out this, or is she telling someone about it in the past tense? Is it even her or her talking about someone else doing it? This further nuance would also help.

How about it OP?

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Muarck
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 07:09 pm
@Diest TKO,
It is a woman.
She's out ranged over a husband's infidelity which has caused the loss of her best friend.
She says it to a new friend when they are discussing their pasts/presents.
But she says it as if explaining a feeling not as if it were something she would actually act on. Her very next line is: "I think I've sworn off sex..."
boomerang
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 07:22 pm
@Muarck,
Then maybe she'd say something like...

I should just pick up some guy and drag him home for some revenge sex.
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Ceili
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 07:26 pm
@Muarck,
Why no break it into two phrases..
'Want to see revenge? I'd take on the bar car before I go near you?
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Sglass
 
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Reply Mon 12 Oct, 2009 10:51 pm
A little recreational gang band should settle my nerves Anyone with a taste for the bizarre join me in the club car.
Gala
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 05:30 am
@Muarck,
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Yeah, and I thought about shtup too! I like the word, but I think it comes down to the same problem. It sounds like I'm trying to replace **** with something else. And therefore ends up sounding kind of fake.

I didn't think shtup would make it into your script, it seems a little too comical a word in the context you're writing.
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parados
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 07:00 am
When in doubt check the thesaurus..

How about a "pay back lay"?

That gives you the opportunity to explain it without using "****"

"It's a retaliation copulation"

I wonder if using sex as a weapon won't get you an R rating in and of itself. If you just went and shot them, it would be G.
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LionTamerX
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 07:01 am
How about "pull a train" ?
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sozobe
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 07:10 am
@Muarck,
Your later details helped but can you give a bit more context? What's said before the "Actually..."?
sozobe
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 07:15 am
@sozobe,
Maybe

"Maybe I should go to some dive bar and tell the fellas to line up... and then make sure [name of cheating husband] finds out about it..."

implied but not specific
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Diest TKO
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 10:05 am
You know, it might be best to use non-specific language and a suggestive tone.

For instance, just say

"Oh, I know of a way to get even."

I think many audiences will catch the inference to revenge and to sex if the inflection is right.

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Muarck
 
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Reply Tue 13 Oct, 2009 10:51 am
@sozobe,
The two characters (man and woman) are speaking about their sex-lives. When character admits he hasn't really been with anyone since his wife left him.

The woman (who has just left her husband) says:

Woe! That’s sad cause I’m not even going to sleep with you...

Then as if she's correcting her previous statement:

Actually, I’d bang a whole train of guys just for revenge.
But I think I’ve just sworn off sex…for the rest of my life.
Muarck
 
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Reply Wed 14 Oct, 2009 08:33 pm
@Sglass,
She's not trying to calm down by screwing someone though. I literally mean a revenge ****. Screwing someone to get back at someone else, to belittle or insult someone else.
OmSigDAVID
 
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Reply Wed 14 Oct, 2009 10:57 pm
@Muarck,
Muarck wrote:

She's not trying to calm down by screwing someone though.
I literally mean a revenge ****.
Screwing someone to get back at someone else,
to belittle or insult someone else.
Even tho I have a cousin who told me that she actually did it
for the reason that u indicated (husband's infidelity),
I had a very hard time figuring out what u had in mind in that line,
until I finished reading this whole thead.

For the sake of your audience's understanding what 's going on,
u r gonna need to be clear about the idea, or u 'll just leave your audience behind as u leave on the train.
Muarck
 
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Reply Thu 15 Oct, 2009 09:31 am
@OmSigDAVID,
I appreciate the help and thought, but I was honestly asking: "Whats a non or less vulgar replacement for the phrase: 'Revenge ****'?" I'm not expecting the Able2Know community to understand the motivations and interests of my main characters via 5 lines of dialog. I will handle conveying the story and personality where neccessary. What I'm asking is: "What the **** is a non or less vulgar replacement for the phrase: 'Revenge ****'?"
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Gala
 
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Reply Fri 16 Oct, 2009 12:22 pm
@Muarck,
I've forgotten-- why is "bang" not going to work?
Muarck
 
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Reply Sat 17 Oct, 2009 02:56 am
@Gala,
What would the statement be then?
Bang a train of guys just for a little revenge?
Granted its not bad, but doesn't quite have the punch I want.
 

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