Wed 18 Feb, 2009 10:38 pm
Could some member correct any errors in the following text. Many thanks.
This time, we have published the memorial photograph collection of our High Priest’s visit as a memento of the ceremony for the first anniversary of the establishment of the Kaimyo-in and the inauguration of the Hokkeko Kaimyo-in Chapter. I shall be very pleased if this book enables you to recall your sense of gratitude to our former High Priest Nikken Shonin and our current High Priest Nichinyo Shonin and maintain your joy and determination that you upheld during the Ceremony and Kick-off Meeting.
The piece consists of two excessively long sentences.
To what does "This time" refer?
I would prefer shorter sentences.