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Wed 3 Sep, 2003 09:16 pm
The tears flee from my eyes to escape the pain
They beat down on my chest, yes my heart feels the rain
If one could explain the way a sane man can maintain
I'd greatly appreciate the knowledge that I would gain
In a world filled with hopes and desires
Why does it hurt so much when we try to fly higher
As if the air is too thin and my lungs grow tired
Dealing with this pain in my chest it's like my heart is on fire
Not only does it hurt but there's such rage inside
It starts to bubble over until I feel it behind my eyes
It only makes it worse knowing that I want to cry
But I'm a grown ass man so I hold it inside
One or two might drip but that's it
When I was younger I let loose to many for this ****
I can't go back and the path I was on is blocked off
Should I wait for it to clear up or should I just walk off
I can't decide so I'll just rest, I'll pause
And for the answer I'll ask GOD
Sorry for the unrefined flow but hopefully it conveys my confusion somewhat
I hear you
Tonight I cried, not really knowing why. Yet, it's funny how your work seemed to describe exactly what I feel inside. Strangers bound by a simple commonality: A desire to end the confusion, the sadness, and the longing. I'm sorry for your pain... the rain will go away, someday. For now, I pray, you can walk away... Sometimes that's the easiest way.
Well, your poem makes me feel like my own
true experience:
she said: I don't have an attitude problem, you have a
perception problem
i really liked your poem. I took it as you were in a horrible situation, you started to get better through hard work but now you feel yourself falling again. I can relate to that and i thought your flow was just fine.
For what it's worth
You deserve a granola bar or something for that one, brother. It's a rarity for me to read another's entire poem... and it's even more of a rarity for me to actually like it if I do. I liked how it was... real. So would you appreciate a S'mores flavored Kudos bar or Peanut Butter? The one thing is that I'm not quite religious so I don't really feel the part about GOD.
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