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I wrote a song

 
 
Reply Sat 16 Feb, 2008 04:19 pm
Blessed and Impressed

We started out as acquaintances
Nothing much really happening
You were nice and you seemed to care
I thought our plans seemed pretty fair

I thought that I'd been,
Blessed and impressed
By your being
I think that I'm fallin
But please see
I'm fragile and torn
I ask you to be gentle with me

As the hours turned into days
I wondered if you felt the same
All I know is you made me smile
And I want you to stick around a while

I knew that I'd been
Blessed and impressed
By your scene
I know that I'm fallin
But please see
I'm fragile and torn
I ask you to be gentle with me

What if I said you are the most
Beautiful thing
Would you believe me?
And what if I said
You could mean everything to me?

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Its a little rough version so far and isn't quite finished
But it would be nice to know what people think?
And I know it can be hard figuring out how its sang and stuff
but you can always sing it in your own way? =)

Please comment
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Letty
 
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Reply Sat 16 Feb, 2008 04:43 pm
D.J. Welcome to A2K. I like your song, but it would be nice to know the key and the melody. Also, are you a man or a woman? Often, that does make a difference in feeling your lyrics. It will help, too, to distinguish between the verses, chorus and the bridge.
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TTH
 
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Reply Sat 16 Feb, 2008 04:51 pm
I like the lyrics Very Happy
oh and btw hi
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Izzie
 
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Reply Sat 16 Feb, 2008 05:09 pm
Hi & welcome....

I like your words too... words from the heart can never be judged by anyone, except you - but I can feel them - so keep writing and say what you feel! Your words sound heartfelt - that's gotta be a good thing - right?

Good Luck - keep going Smile
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DontJudgeMeOnMyWords
 
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Reply Sun 17 Feb, 2008 04:14 am
Hey....

I am a girl
And this is my first attempt at ever writing a song
So I'm glad to hear some good feedback already =)

I don't really know how to show the key and stuff yet but when I do I'll update it =)

Thanks to those who replied

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TTH
 
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Reply Sun 17 Feb, 2008 10:22 am
Ditto on what Izzie said. I felt the words came from the heart. Those seem to be the best songs imo. Please do update the song when you are done. I would love to see it. Best of luck to you Very Happy
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The Pentacle Queen
 
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Reply Mon 25 Feb, 2008 09:09 am
I'd say just keep going, don't judge yourself to harshly and just keep listening to yourself and being creative.
Find your own voice.
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