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Re: editing of passage
A good piece, Yoong Liat. It hardly needs editing.

One Saturday afternoon, David was walking in the park when he saw a dog. He could hear it whining, so he walked towards it to find out why.

David examined the dog and found a thorn in its left forepaw. He quickly pulled it out. Then he took a packet of biscuits from his trouser pocket and gave a few to the dog. It ate them quickly. It must have been very hungry. After it had eaten, David patted its head and it wagged its tail happily.

Suddenly,a snake slithered out from the bushes. It was moving towards David, who being frightened, stood rooted to the spot. He was too frightened to react. On seeing the snake, the dog was not afraid. It showed its courage by biting the snake on the neck. The snake struggled, but the dog did not budge. Soon the snake died.

David patted the dog to express his gratitude. As he believed that it was a stray, David decided to take it home. When his parents returned home, David related how the dog saved him, and asked his parents whether they would allow him to keep it as a pet. His parents did not object as they were grateful that the dog had killed the snake before it could reach David.

David named his dog "Bravo". Every evening, David takes it for a walk. It is now David's constant companion.

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