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It was a warm day so Jeremy and his family went to the beach. Jeremy's mother packed a picnic basket with food, including sandwiches, pears, oranges, and cans of drink. Jeremy's brother brought his camera and Jeremy did not forget his beachball.

Jeremy and his brother threw the beachball to each other while swimming. They enjoyed themselves very much.

Jeremy's mother sat on the mat under a shady tree, reading a book. Jeremy's father put on his swimming trunks and went for a swim. He was a good swimmer. Later he joined his sons in throwing the beachball to one another.

It was about noon when they had their lunch. After lunch they took pictures of one another. After that, they bathed and changed and soon after, left for home. It was indeed a wonderful day for the entire family.

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Note: people would not put a basketball in water. A beachball is a lightweight ball used for fun around water.

Hi Sullyfish

Many thanks for sparing your time in editing the passage.

It was about noon when they had their lunch. After lunch they took pictures of one another. The family then bathed and changed and soon left for home. It was indeed a wonderful day.

This passage originally made repeated use of the word "After". which although correct felt awkward.

Dadpad

Thanks for letting me know not to repeat 'after'.