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jjorge
 
Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 12:02 pm
"20:20"

(for Two Young Friends On Their Wedding Day)


My young, virtual friends,
Clear-eyed, confident,
Staring out today at your future,
With tanks filled and all revved up,
Remember this:
Your journey's underway already;
You've seen detours, bad roads,
and worse, but you survived,
...and kept on going.



Still twenty, and yet,
Combat-tested;
Worry, heart-ache,
Sleepless nights,
Look at all you've had to face,

...and bested.



'Getting Hitched'
They used to call it,
But you've been hitched already,
Or maybe stitched together
I should say,
By trials and troubles,
And treasured moments
Along your way.



You...rebels, acter-outers,
Impulsive youth...
Convention flouters,
You've paid your dues,
Earned your way,
And now, to all the
Hand-wringers, the nay sayers,
And to all the doubters,
You can smile and softly say:

"We made it, and This is our day"



A pair of twenties,
Crisp and new,
(well, not quite new)
No folds or creases yet,
May you grow together,
Win your bet
On each other,
And may you be a pair
Of hundreds
Before you're through.



You plunged into life
Off the high board
...and made it.
And today, as you marry,
(I can tell)
One I know, who loves you fiercely,
Loves you even more.
...How much can a heart swell?




May you have tender moments
To ease life's sorrows and slings,
And may you know the selfless love,
--the joy-- that children bring.


So Carpe Diem! Cheers! Good health!
Long life! ..... and Happiness,
and to you both, and those you love,

God Bless,
God Bless,
God Bless.

(jjorge)
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jjorge
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 12:04 pm
My friend JD's daughter is getting married this weekend.
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Eva
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 01:23 pm
Re: "20:20"
jjorge*197982* wrote:
A pair of twenties,
Crisp and new,
(well, not quite new)
No folds or creases yet,
May you grow together,
Win your bet
On each other,
And may you be a pair
Of hundreds
Before you're through.(jjorge)



The entire poem was wonderful, jjorge, but I especially liked this part. Bravo!
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jjorge
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 02:44 pm
Thanks Eva. Glad you liked the poem.

You may be interested to know that i've never actually met this young couple, although I've spoken on the phone with the bride on a number of occasions. Nevertheless, my special friend, J.D. has been telling me about them in great detail every day that we work together.

This was, I suppose, a 'high risk' couple who became pregnant at age seventeen and had two children by age twenty. a third child died shortly after birth. Through it all they have been devoted to each other, worked very, very hard and are wonderful parents. recently they have been looking for their first house.

Needless to say they received (understandably) a lot of criticism,
especially about the pregnancies, but they stuck together, and, with the love and help of dedicated parents they have surprised many people and grown a lot in the process.
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Eva
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 03:20 pm
Good for them!!!

Most people, myself included, make such bad choices at that age. But some, incredibly, do seem to know what they're doing. I applaud them and wish them the very best of luck.
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Piffka
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 04:35 pm
Jjorge -- Really nice... love it about them being crisp twenties and hoping they'll be two hundreds together. A nice way to wish them well. Good going!
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Wed 6 Aug, 2003 04:39 pm
This one definitely needs music...the rythym begs for it Very Happy Good luck to them!
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the prince
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 06:37 am
Stunning - as usual !
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Vivien
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 06:41 am
brilliant it was beautifully phrased and never got schmaltzy and sickly
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jjorge
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 08:41 am
Piffka, Cav, Gautam, Vivien,


Thank you friends for your kind words.

I'm mostly quite pleased with it but I wish I had a few more days to refine and polish a few of the lines.

Because it's time-sensitive (I've got to send it out today by priority mail) I have to let it go as is.


Carpe diem --jjorge
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faith
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 09:08 am
this is beautiful....

"And to all the doubters,
You can smile and softly say: "

"We made it, and This is our day"

i really like these lines
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jjorge
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 08:40 pm
Thank you Faith. I'm glad you liked it.

I was surprised at how much feeling I put into the poem, and how
fond I am of these two kids, even though I've not met them face-to-face.

Well, now that I think of it I guess that fact that I adore the bride-to-be's mother
( the one "...who loves...(them)...fiercely..." ) has something to do with it!
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Piffka
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 09:14 pm
Well, it has definitely been a labor of love. You've done really well, Jjorge.
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jjorge
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 09:26 pm
Piff,

Thank you my friend.


PS
Is your U.K. trip getting close? Are you getting 'psyched'?

I went to a Howard Dean meet-up in Providence last night...very exciting.

I made a verbal commitment to use two weeks vacation time to go to New Hampshire for Dean in January- ie. the last two weeks before the primary.
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Piffka
 
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Reply Thu 7 Aug, 2003 09:49 pm
Hey, Jjorge!
It about six weeks before we leave for Scotland. My daughter & her bf leave in five weeks. It's such a short trip, we'll be back before we're gone.

I'm impressed that you apparently liked Dean so much. The two weeks are to work on his campaign, I take it? You have been busy! I was wondering. Two weeks of vacation you're giving up though. Sheeesh. He'd better be worth it.
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jjorge
 
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Reply Fri 8 Aug, 2003 04:29 pm
Piffka wrote:
Hey, Jjorge!
It about six weeks before we leave for Scotland. My daughter & her bf leave in five weeks. It's such a short trip, we'll be back before we're gone.

I'm impressed that you apparently liked Dean so much. The two weeks are to work on his campaign, I take it? You have been busy! I was wondering. Two weeks of vacation you're giving up though. Sheeesh. He'd better be worth it.


Hi Piff,

Sorry you have to come back sooner than you would prefer. Maybe your next trip can be longer.

I DO like Dean very much. Enough that he becomes the first candidate I have ever worked for in my life. I think he IS worth it.

Yes, the idea of New Hamster* is to work on Dean's campaign...in the dead of Winter in the frozen North no less!!

I don't mind using vacation time to work the NH primary. I accrue about 5 1/2 weeks of total time off each year (ie. 4 wks vacation, plus some personal time, vacation time and compensatory time)
Also, I only work three shifts per week and they are all crammed together between Monday midnight and Wednesday midnight. So, I could actually take a five day mini-vacation every week if I wanted to.
(and could afford it)




*Gosh, I'd better stop saying New Hamster or all I'll do for Dean is p*ss off all of those N.H. folks!!
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