I am not a writing teacher, and this is not school. The idea here is that we can all teach each other to be better writers. Constructive criticism (e. g. always welcomed. Destructive criticism (e. g. you stink!) is never welcomed. Vague criticisms and/or praise (e. g. that was amazing!) is lovely but it's a lot more helpful if there are some specifics.
Everyone is welcome to write, and everyone is welcome to critique. Anyone wishing to suggest a workshop topic should send me a Private Message. Workshop topics will be opened pretty much whenever I have topics.
Here's today's challenge:
Most pieces have some sort of a pivotal scene or line. There's just a place wherein the story ceases moving in a straight line and veers off in another direction. Whether this is a red herring planted in a mystery, or a religious character's epiphany or the maturation of a character in a coming-of-age story, it's all the same. Essentially, there's a dividing point between part 1 and part 2, even if the parts aren't identified, per se
I'm going to provide you with a number of potentially pivotal sentences. Use whichever one you want and frame a story around it. The sentences are going to be somewhat generic so as to admit of a lot of possible story lines. Here are the sentences (you might want to italicize the sentence in your piece so that it can be readily found):
(1) They taunted him until he cried out an embarrassing name for his mother.
(2) She turned to her date and said, "I don't think this is working out."
(3) The contents of the room shifted, and he was pinned under the wreckage.
(4) Her father passed her by and did not acknowledge her presence.
(5) A loud noise was heard overhead.
(6) The crash happened in an instant.
If you don't like any of these sentences, that's fine, use one of your own, but please identify it as the turning point in your story.
I'll post a sample below. Feel free to critique or add samples on this thread. If you're critiquing someone, please use the quote function and quote the first line or so of their piece so that we can keep everything straight. Pieces should be less than about 500 words long. Thanks!
Here's a link to the last Workshop: http://www.able2know.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=9602