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Wed 25 Jul, 2007 08:59 pm
I've only written one real poem in my life, besides a bunch of limericks. Here it is:
America Betrayed
America has been betrayed
By the corporate politicians' greed,
By a President, who's only creed
Is "Get the oil! No need for trade,
"We want control, so let's invade!"
The neo-cons' agenda's weighed
On the moral scales, and found wanting,
Like the robber-barons, who still are haunting
The concience of a world decayed,
A world where decency's been mislaid.
For long the corporations preyed
On the cheapest labour they could find,
And "Profit Only!" they've enshrined,
While the ones who work are underpaid,
Who slave away with pen or spade.
The politicians masquerade
As pious saviours, while they steal
The nation's sweat, and then conceal
The avarice of their charade,
While responsibility they evade.
But now the truth has been displayed,
Though we've just begun to recognize
The wolves who long were in disguise;
We're not just sheep, we're not afraid,
And we WILL NOT let our country fade!
Good poem, Unbeliever, friend-
Will your story have an end?
I hope we'll live long enough to find out.
I think this poem deserves more comments than just mine. It is a very commendable effort, on a difficult subject, especially as a first attempt.
I don't know much about poetry, but I like the sentiment.
F---ing corporate scum.
I don't know much about poetry myself.
The style seems nice but not the content.
I've been thinking about writing another poem with the same style, but different content. The muse hasn't struck again, though.
Unbeliever wrote:I've been thinking about writing another poem with the same style, but different content. The muse hasn't struck again, though.
I would like to see you do that. I hope the muse strikes.
Unbeliever, welcome to A2K. It's the content of your poem that makes America sit up and take notice.
Very well written,
Very well said,
As one who reads
The book of the dead.
Oil slick beaches,
Birds weighted wings
No clean water
No songs to sing.
Letty wrote:. It's the content of your poem that makes America sit up and take notice.
- not bad for a first poem
Betrayal can be a hard thing to swallow - but it seems your words have hit
home with the first strike - you must be very satisfied with that.
Congratulations
Well, I agree for the most with the content, and I think it's a good first effort.
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