:) #2 argumental essay on bad parenting

I guess this essay sucks. LOL.

Why are those brackets there? Were you told to use them when quoting?

Parents need to be more understanding and ACcept the fact that their kids are in school to learn. Like adults have jobs, children have jobs too. Getting up everyday, going to school, and doing homework are kids' jobs. Parents need to make sure their children make IT through school with as little struggle as possible, so they will get through school successfully and become successful adults.

[new paragraph] Constructive criticism is very important for children to learn at a young age. HOWEVER, NOT letting your kids find their own individuality is a terrible thing. All kids are different even if THEY have siblings. Kids have different interestS, attitudes, personalities, likes, and dislikes which make them individuals. Suppressing this by being controlling and overbearing can have negative affects on children, making them argumentative AND CAUSE THEM TO lash out AND LOSE respect FOR and trust in their parents. THESE KIDS MAY turn to others to find that understanding AND TO FILL NEEDS that THEY'RE not getting from their own parents. This can lead to bigger problems. Kids could start hanging out with the wrong crowds, WHICH could lead to disastrous situations down the road such as sex, drugs, drinking and loss of life. So being toO controlling and overbearing can have disastrous EFFECTS, children will HAVE a LOT of secrets because THEY FEEL THEY CANNOT confide in their parents.

Parents who are friends with their kids and are not extremely strict will have wonderful relationships with lots of trust. A calm parent who listens and talks to their child about almost anything will know what's going on in their kid's life and how their studies are going at school. There WILL be FEWER secrets and possiblY no secrets, BECAUSE CHILDREN WHO TRUST THEIR PARENTS TO UNDERSTAND WILL BE MORE WILLING TO ACCEPT THEIR HELP AND GUIDANCE.

Thanks. I already handed in my essays two weeks or less. I pretty much checked everything out. I managed to get an A- in the class so I think my essay went all right. I had my professor check it over first. He wanted me to write a lot of I think, or i feel parents should. I thought that was strange because my english professors always told me never to write I in an essay. I changed a few sentences around to. Thanks for the feed back again. Jen