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Thu 1 Mar, 2007 04:11 pm
Or improve this one:
To whom it may concern,
This letter is to request a copy of transcript of records for Moana Marie AnyLastName for the graduation year 2007.
My date of birth is July 18, 1988 and please mail this request to this address 14520 Sonora St. Unit 10, Panorama City, California, 91444.
Thank you so much for your help.
Sincerely Yours,
Moana Marie AnyLastName
Hey, are you really in Panorama City?
That looks fine to me. Request letters aren't like cover letters when you reply for a job, for example -- they don't have to convey anything in particular, just provide the needed information.
Only thing that really needs to change is, instead of "please mail this request to...", have "please mail the transcript records to..."
No particular reason it needs to be in the third person. Can just have "this letter is to request a copy of MY transcript records..." and then full name and address at the bottom.
Re: Please give me a sample of request letters.
Jeremiah wrote:Or improve this one:
To whom it may concern:
I would appreciate your sending me a copy of my transcript records for graduation year 2007. My date of birth is July 18, 1988.
Please mail the transcript to:
Moana Marie AnyLastName
14520 Sonora Street, Unit 10,
Panorama City, CA 91444.
If there is any additional information you need, please let me know. I can be reached at 222-555-1111. Thank you your attention to this matter.
Sincerely yours,
Moana Marie AnyLastName
Well that's certainly much better!
Part of my point is that if you have a lousy cover letter you won't get the job; if you have an awkward request for records that nonetheless is clear and contains the necessary information you'll still get the records.
Probably need to pay for it too, and have something in the letter about that. ("I have enclosed the $15 fee," or whatever.)
You forgot a "for" -- it should be --
Thank you for your attention to this matter.
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Oh, I'm moving this topic to Teaching, I assume this is just about requests for transcripts? If not, holler.
Got it! Thanks! I hope this works...
Oops, sorry about the for.
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