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what do you think of my poem? (edited again)

 
 
Reply Tue 17 Mar, 2015 10:01 am
Why can’t you see that we were meant to be?
I was my true self I when saw you in person; I did my best
It was the same person you talked to in the summer and fall of 2013
You don’t know it, but I was the one you wanted to marry
Why can’t you see it was still me?
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person
Trust me; I know better in this situation
I know it could work out more than you think so
We’re neither the perfect couple nor the worst
And no, I don’t need to find “someone better”
I ******* chose you

“60% match. We aren’t compatible.” You said
Complete. Bullshit.
You Don’t KNOW
How compatible we are
You don’t KNOW
Exactly what I want
And you don’t know how hard I’ve tried
Maybe you don’t know who I really am

We’re neither the perfect couple nor the worst
I know its not 99%; I did something on okcupid to make it that high
But I do know It’s at least 87
At minimum 83
The proof I have, I can’t tell you
Because I’ll never get another chance
I know you’re confused by now, but trust me; I know better in this situation
I for once, am the wise one

I’m still waiting for you to see how amazing you thought I was
For you to say “I love you” again as the real me and not as the fantasy
I must have a magical charm that only goes on when I talked to you that way

I wish you had more faith
I wish I could make you see
But you can’t put glasses on a blind person

You don’t know how lucky you are to have me as your friend
I’ve helped you so many times in disguise

Well I’m sorry if you think I’m awkward
But that’s not who I am

And you only notice me when I play make believe

…I’ll never forget the look on your face when you thought I woke up from the coma
Somehow I’ll make you see
That you were meant for me
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fresco
 
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Reply Tue 17 Mar, 2015 04:38 pm
@alyssapaganproblem,
Quote:
Why can’t you see that we were meant to be?

(....lengthy self indulgent boring monologue bracketed by 3 lines of rhyme....)

Somehow I’ll make you see
That you were meant for me


Catharsis it may be. Poetry it ain't.
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neologist
 
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Reply Tue 17 Mar, 2015 05:01 pm
@alyssapaganproblem,
Your romantic language warms my heart.
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Zk
 
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Reply Mon 3 Aug, 2015 11:44 am
@alyssapaganproblem,
Exquisite !
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