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Memo
To: All staff
From: Liu Yueyue
Date: September 19
Subject: A trip to Thailand
The total net profits of our company have increased by 40% in the third quarter compared with the profits last quarter. This is exciting news for all. I want to show my sincere thanks to you for all you have done.

Undeniably, it has been your creativity, positive attitude and initiative which has made our company tops in this industry and it is your precious time and labor that have produced these impressive profits.

As an expression of my gratitude and to repay you for those efforts, I am offering everyone a free five-day trip to Thailand including transportation, accommodations, meals, and a round-trip international airplane ticket.

If you have any question, please contact my assistant at 18971393955.


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The total net profits of our company have increased by 40% in the third quarter compared with last quarter. Excited news for all. I hereby show my sincere thanks to you for all you have done.
Obviously, it can not be denied that it is your creativity, positivity and initiative, our company that make our company top in this industry and that it is your great effort and precious time that yield good profits.
To return your pay, I suggest a free five-day trip to Thailand including transportation, accommodation, meals, and round-trip international airplane ticket. If you have any question, please contact my assistant at 18971393955.

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