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a title for this poem

 
 
salima
 
Reply Mon 17 Aug, 2009 07:30 pm
what can i call this? 'daydreams'? 'interlude'? i was going to call it seth, but i dont like that idea. any suggestions?


Whispersoft and sensual, stealing my attention,
casual and comfortable, touching me as deeply, subtly as my breath.
What if this is the real thing at last, is it worth one more try?
So many dreams shattered in the light of next day, how much more pain is it worth
to find out if we can keep love alive until we die?
Beneath the surface, a glimmer of apprehension
casts a shadow on the hope of a future with the man who calls himself Seth.
What if there's no purple lights dancing on the backs of my eyelids
when he holds me in his arms? What if we don't walk in the rain til we're soaked
and we never stay awake all night laughing til we cry?
Suddenly he voices the fears I dare not mention,
settling the issue for both of us with a good-bye as cold and final as death
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GoshisDead
 
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Reply Mon 17 Aug, 2009 09:49 pm
@salima,
Retina Tapetum is what comes to mind for some reason.
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salima
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 08:48 am
@salima,
retina as in back of eyeballs? tapetum, you got me there. latin?
Didymos Thomas
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 12:16 pm
@salima,
Why does a poem need to be titled at all?
salima
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 12:26 pm
@Didymos Thomas,
Didymos Thomas;84081 wrote:
Why does a poem need to be titled at all?


because i want to find it in my database when i alphabetize a list? i mean how many times can i use 'untitled'? but though i am only thinking of practicality, i would rather give it a name that means something rather then a number i guess.
Didymos Thomas
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 12:46 pm
@salima,
Unnamed poems are usually either listed by number or by the first line/phrase of the poem. ee cummings poems are typically (all of them that I can recall) listed by the opening line or phrase, for example.

Of course, even naming the poem is part of the artistic statement. If you think it needs a name, give it a name. If the first line or phrase is all that is needed, leave it there. If a number, a number. It's all part of the artist's choice.
GoshisDead
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 12:50 pm
@Didymos Thomas,
Its the reflective layer of the retina in a dog's eye.
salima
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 01:10 pm
@GoshisDead,
GoshisDead;84102 wrote:
Its the reflective layer of the retina in a dog's eye.


well, i will consider it-it definitely does relate to the subject somehow, though for the life of me i dont understand how. you mean that thing that makes them glow in the dark, right?
GoshisDead
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 01:26 pm
@salima,
yes that's the thing
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Khethil
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 03:03 pm
@salima,
A Price
Whispers
Quiet Lies
Don't Speak
Fragile
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mister kitten
 
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Reply Tue 18 Aug, 2009 03:35 pm
@salima,
'Trance' or 'Broken Trance'
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