@Someonesissue,
Someonesissue wrote:
Need your opinion, thanksss
An honest opinion? Sounds like a crush more than a relationship. It sounds like you may also wear a fedora.
Quote:A girl with the name of light, the name itself tells aboutof her beauty
Sit with her at'til 2 am just to listen her angelic voice,
make aA single glance my way and I get lost into those bigocean eyes,
And, when she only windsbreathes her first word to you, you want the world to stop stops and bows down to her,
The way she sings, to the way she hums, the music that playsyou hear when she takes a breath.all you get is a sweet lullaby
Her long dark hair falls like snow in snowymisty mountains, every inch of her artful skin screamsmoans poetry.
I don't ever want to stop but to just keep on loving her. That is my dream.
So, corrected (IMO, who am I to judge poetry?)
A girl with the name of light, the name itself tells of her beauty.
Sit with her 'til 2 am just to listen her angelic voice.
A single glance and I get lost in her ocean eyes.
And, when she breathes her first word to you, the world stops and bows down
The way she sings, the way she hums, the music you hear when she takes a breath.
Her long dark hair falls like snow in misty mountains, every inch of her artful skin moans poetry.
I don't ever want to stop but to just keep on loving her. That is my dream.
There is more I'd change here, but then it becomes mine and would probably lose your feel.
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