Sat 14 Jan, 2017 12:02 am
Hi there, I have a sentence I am editing. Could you help me to punctuate it. It sounds right when spoken, but its proper written form defies me. Suggestions for changes to the whole sentence are also welcome, but I am most interested in how this should be punctuated:
"Conventional signifiers of gender are played upon, at times to undermine them, and otherwise to capitalise on their cultural meaning"
Part of the issue with this sentence is that it's in passive voice. It's also something of a run-on, although the last clause isn't really independent.
Try something more like:
(or whatever your subject is, e. g. society, etc. Adjust the pronoun, using I or we or they, etc. and the proper verb form accordingly if you have to) play upon conventional gender signifiers. We do this, at times, to undermine them, and otherwise to capitalise on their culture meaning.