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Grammar question

 
 
1jane1
 
Reply Sat 7 Jun, 2014 07:42 pm
Poetry line:

I'm the only married one,
No kids and an unemployed one

Is grammar good? tx)

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knaivete
 
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Reply Sat 7 Jun, 2014 11:31 pm
@1jane1,
Try an edit.

The syntax in line 2 is too unusual.

Poetry often involves metre, foot and rhyme.
1jane1
 
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Reply Sun 8 Jun, 2014 12:37 am
@knaivete,
agreed. all fixed now Smile tx!
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