Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2012 05:48 am
Walking on a tight rope
for your amusement
or death
will I amuse you
for a moment?

If I fall
and die
will I bring a shock
to your life
in grey?

If I survive
I bring inspiration
to your life
in your line
of no where?

Do I shine
with the smiles
I present

If I cried
would you feel emotion
in the unrealistic

We live
on borrowed time
equally resting
on the judgmental

But who weighs the most
weighs truest
from a book
I read

If I
weigh the most,
as a person
will you view me

I am no god
I am flesh
In the shadows
we all
were born
and with you
I crept

Singing songs
in sing alongs
from the VHS

I'm bred
Through time
in ticking clocks
which chills
on land

Now life
is in numerical
but even numbers
have an end
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2012 05:59 am
What were you going for? I found it a bit loaded with teenage thoughts and teenage angst .
How about viewing some things greater than yourself.
Youve got talent, dont waste it on narcissism.
Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2012 10:44 am
If I say that
you moved me.
To a place
to be true.

Would you see that
bold adventure
Lost still.
In terms.
You knew.

Would your break fall.
Or would
fall be broken.
For what you writ today.
Speaks greyly.. greyly still,

to my grey notion.
Reply Sun 16 Dec, 2012 09:50 am
It is far from loaded with merely teenage angst, in fact, there may very well be 'none'.

Numerical lock
Stifling slowly
the truly alive.

Femininity projects
Defiance of hope
Against hope
perceived un flawed.
Within both halves.
of any larger whole.

Demons are merely Human male children, or is it Human male children are merely demons? ... Puppy dogs tales?

Though I apolagise, for a man grown from a boy who preferred to wear condoms on his head, I have not learnt much respect of others etiquette.
Which leaves it squarely on Women to protect the future from the need to stifle the world.
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Reply Mon 17 Dec, 2012 01:16 am
I honestly don't know where I was going with this poem. I was really drunk when I wrote it.
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Reply Mon 17 Dec, 2012 02:00 am
did you compliment my poem WITH a poem?
Reply Wed 19 Dec, 2012 05:57 pm
Well, I tried, I have hypoxia of the blood... So so am I ultimately.

Erm, well, I smoke a lot.... and combined with other substance issues damage it results in a lowering of control, re: Hysterical potential, that is not to suggest I laugh, though rather my state is a percentage Hyena. I feel.
Reply Thu 20 Dec, 2012 02:31 am
Lol awesome. Keep it up d(^~^d)
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