what do you think about my poem?

Sorry youngman, for fear of discouraging you from further writing; I found your poem wanting. But I would like to see you post more poems on this forum.

That's gotta be a big shirt. Or are the letters small?

i suggested the poem printed on the back, in letters big enough that people can read. but that is not important.

i was just surprised that no one voted for my design at all, and we have hundreds of students.

Life is cruel, youngman. Better prepare yourself.

Youngman, life may be cruel, but sometimes some tinkering can make it better.

I wonder if you were serious with your poem or just having some fun with us. But, no matter. I tinkered with your poem a bit and came up with the following as an example to help you start learning about the structure of one form of poetry---if you are serious. :wink:


YOUR POEM:
I left home in a blizzard,
for a dream that I will fulfill;
Four years of sweat and joy,
then the M.D. that I will be.

When the plane flies high,
the island will vanish away;
At the end of rainbow,
hoping that you will dream of me.

MY VERSION:

I left home in a blizzard of hopeful dreams
on a high-flying plane that whisked me away
to four long years of study to give me the means
of reaching my goal to be a healer one day.

Welcome to Able2Know, Youngman, glad to have you here. Keep writing and you will get better.

BumbleBeeBoogie