In need of the opening line

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I've nearly completed my sweeping novel, except that I have not decided on how to word the very first sentence.

Can ATK help me in writing that memorable line?

Thank you for your input in advance. I'm sure I've come to the right place for advice.

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@tycoon,

Yes, I'm sure you have.

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You might want to give a clue about the subject.

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@tycoon,

Well we should need a brief synopsis of the novel. Who will be speaking the opening line: a narrator, the lead character, etc? Will it need to be in the first person or the third person?

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@tycoon,

Discard the entire first chapter, then submit.

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@dyslexia,

dyslexia wrote:

Yes, I'm sure you have.

This is pretty good! Selected answer so far!

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@Ceili,

Ceili wrote:

You might want to give a clue about the subject.

Not bad, but perhaps a bit vague. Maybe a little tightening?

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@tsarstepan,

tsarstepan wrote:

Well we should need a brief synopsis of the novel. Who will be speaking the opening line: a narrator, the lead character, etc? Will it need to be in the first person or the third person?

I reject this submission. I don't like colons.

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@Ceili,

Ceili wrote:

You might want to give a clue about the subject.

Ha ha ha ha ha from deep within my trunk, and not the one in the basement...

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@tycoon,

tycoon wrote:

I've nearly completed my sweeping novel, except that I have not decided on how to word the very first sentence.

Can ATK help me in writing that memorable line?

Thank you for your input in advance. I'm sure I've come to the right place for advice.

It was not about this or that, or about anything, not about love, or trust, or honor, or revenge, and thinking it was about something was my first and greatest mistake from which all other mistakes followed...

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@Fido,

Fido wrote:

Ha ha ha ha ha from deep within my trunk, and not the one in the basement...

This has real possibilities. Seems to tie in very well.

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It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.

Or maybe you would like something like "Call me Ishmael".

They are both catchy, and if you also don't like semi colons, you could probably work around it.

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@tycoon,

He thought of himself as a bit of a tycoon like most petty thieves.

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@laughoutlood,

laughoutlood wrote:

He thought of himself as a bit of a tycoon like most petty thieves; but he found he was a foil in the hands of buffoons; the police..

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@roger,

roger wrote:

It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.

No, the semicolon is the deal breaker.Those ******* things. Besides, it's like you can't decide whether it's the best or the worst time. Very indecisive. This would never work. Very amateurish.

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@tycoon,

You're right. I tried to pull that one, but it was too late to edit.

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@tycoon,

Once upon a time you might have called me Tweedle Dum.

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@tsarstepan,

tsarstepan wrote:

Once upon a time you might have called me Tweedle Dum.

What would you have done with him??? Make him squeal like a pig???

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@tycoon,

These things always take time.

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You see, it's never really been about you at all.

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