Edit this humorous poem, please

I just removed a few of the extraneous words (mostly articles) - they weren't necessary to convey meaning and without them the words have a better flow.

For the Sake of Love

To make my love sweet,
Would I be a "terrorist"?
Oh, let stupid Americans fuss,
While my fellow Chinese hiss!

I'd do anything for my girl,
Even break any rule.
I soar in my dream,
and expand my own realm.

Grasping fate in my hand,
I am king of the world.
Oh, let all gossips die!
Smiling, my heart flies!

Thank you Aidan!

It sounds much better.

But only I couldn't get "
Would I care to be a "terrorist" = Would I be a "terrorist" " well.

In addition, why not use "fly"? It has a better rythme with "die".

I know using "fly" there has broken grammatical rules. But it is a poem. Isn't the breaking allowed?

My suggestion does change the meaning slightly - in your original version it was clear that you are asking yourself thoughtfully, if you'd care to be a terrorist. In mine, I've minimized the syllables by forfeiting that extra step of thought before action. I guess you have to ask yourself if the words that actually show thought before action instead of just imply it are important to you.

Yeah it does break the grammatical rule and though it is a matter of taste and definitely allowed, in this case, doing that actually brings attention to the fact that you're trying too hard for the rhyme.
Actually settling for the correct grammar and the internal rhyme of 'dies' with 'fly' gives the poem a more sophisticated and finished patina than when/if a poet mangles grammar to achieve a simple rhyme.
Do you know what I mean?

I like your poem.

ooo too risible by far, i love your humour

i'd change 'a terrorist' to 'poetic'

then slip noetic and zoetic into the other two stanzas

and don't worry about metre foot or rhyme

yeah hmmm, poetic or terroristic? which way should he go?

I had a second thought though Oristar. In a previous stanza you say, 'I'd do anything for my girl, even break any rule' and then at the end you throw caution to the wind and break that grammatical rule - that has a nice symmetry. I don't know if people would get it or not - I missed it at first.

Thank you Aidan. I completely got you and think your changing has made the poem into a real poem.
Thank you again!

You're welcome Oristar.
I enjoy the poems you post (original and otherwise).

The poem is supposed to be 'humorous'?

The Chinese guy who kissed his girl at the forbidden area and caused the close of the American airport wrote a poem as below:

Never expected I would be a story of cover,
Had I not spent a few precious holidays with my new lover.
Nights were short, and days were long,
Before I knew it, she would be gone.

I thought a real woman deserves a real kiss.
I wanted to do it, so forever she will miss.
It suddenly dawned on me, when the guard went for a dope,
That between my lover and I was just a rope.

I leaped over it, and the rest became history.
To the delayed passengers, I’m sincerely sorry.
Now behind bars I languish,
In peace, but with a little anguish…

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And a controversy is ongoing in Chinese forums. I wrote my poem to "defend" his...

a gnaw go zone?

Yeah. A no-go zone.