HELP PLEASE!!! lotf

I am writing a report on lord of the flies, can someone please tell me if my intro and thesis (<~what the paper is about/ will prove) are any good! let me know ASAP please!

Have you ever wondered how we as humans would survive if for some reason were stranded on a deserted island? Would we have to learn how to survive or would our natural instinct for survival come out? After reading Lord of the Flies I realised a lot about the world that we live in and how our situational instincts effect our behaviors and morals. William Golding wrote the novel Lord of The Flies proving that without a civilized societal environment with rules, government, and an outline of what is right and what is wrong, man will eventually return to his savagery roots. Through the use of representations, both of characteristic and situational, Golding desribes how our nostalgic need for order, both societal and administrative, the existence of a military establishment, and the belief in a supernatural and/or a higher power can shape and even change mans moral behavior.