@usn0814,
To what, your struggle with faith or your poetry?
It's the sort of poem a ten year old would produce, simple rhyming structure with absolutely no depth or place for interpretation.
Blake did it far better with The Lamb, (which should be read alongside The Tyger to do it justice.)
As for your very public crisis of faith on A2K. I don't know what to say or what you wish to achieve. If you convince an Atheist to believe in Christ you've not done anything other than change one mind. You've not proven the existence of God or anything.
And the chances of changing anyone's mind on A2K are virtually nil.