Sentence reworking help please.

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Looking to better rewrite this clunky question for a new IMDb Poll suggestion regarding the most annoying unlicensed Time Square costumed characters.

Which of the following tourist-botherers AKA Unlicensed Times Square Costumed Characters is the most irritating to you if they started to hard-sell solicit selfies for tips from you?

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@tsarstepan,

Which of these tourist-botherers AKA Unlicensed Times Square Costumed Characters would irritate you most if they started hard-sell soliciting selfies for tips from you?

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@jespah,

Thank you Jespah.

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@jespah,

jespah wrote:

Which of these tourist-botherers AKA Unlicensed Times Square Costumed Characters would irritate you most if they started hard-sell soliciting selfies for tips from you?

I would use brackets as such:

Which of these tourist-botherers (AKA Unlicensed Times Square Costumed Characters) would irritate you most if they started hard-sell soliciting selfies for tips from you?

Just makes it a tad less confusing.

Sentence reworking help please.

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