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Reply Tue 12 Apr, 2022 10:26 am
How can I make this sentence more reader friendly:

Attached is a change order for material upgrades for vanities and faucets selected by the customer above insurance allowance of $100.00.
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Reply Wed 13 Apr, 2022 09:21 am
@LBrinkmann,
I read this and couldn't find a way to shorten it (my speciality! lol). In fact, I would even add a word - "the" insurance allowance. It's not necessary, but I would add it.

Another way would be (although it's more awkward): Attached is a change order for material upgrades for customer-selected vanities and faucets above the insurance allowance of $100.00.
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