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Fri 27 Jul, 2018 01:20 am
1. Is the following sentence too long?
2. Is the part in bold correct?
3. I've split the sentence into two paragraphs and and made some amendments. I wonder if it it better. (See (b))
(a) The entirety of ABC religion has
been inherited by the successive High Priests,
entrusted to a single person, and currently has been
inherited by the present High Priest.
(b) The entirety of ABC religion has
been inherited by the successive High Priests.
Entrusted to a single person, it currently is
inherited by the present High Priest.
Thanks.
There is nothing wrong with either version. The second version might be preferable stylistically. Both versions suffer from needless repetition.
@tanguatlay,
Perhaps one might write:
The entirety of ABC religion is entrusted to a single person, the High Priest. The religion has been inherited by each successive High Priest, including the present one.
@Setanta,
Setanta wrote:
Perhaps one might write:
The entirety of ABC religion is entrusted to a single person, the High Priest. The religion has been inherited by each successive High Priest, including the present one.
Thanks, Setanta, for your comments and the suggested sentence.
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