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Help with punctuation in these sentences (taken from a poem)

 
 
Reply Thu 18 Jan, 2018 12:09 pm
The poem is structured as below:



I loved you then and I love you now,

Despite the odd ridiculous row.

And though there’s distance,

This is true,

My love is undying and carries through.



How would I go about structuring this in a straight-lined sentence (without the breaks)? I was thinking possibly like below:



I loved you then and I love you now, despite the odd ridiculous row. And though there’s distance, this is true; my love is undying and carries through.



Any help at all is very welcome - thank you in advance
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layman
 
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Reply Thu 18 Jan, 2018 04:32 pm
@Carrieeee,
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I loved you then and I love you now, despite the odd ridiculous row. And though there’s distance, this is true; my love is undying and carries through.


Looks good to me, except I would use a full colon, not a semi, after "true."

That's because of the word "this," which serves to indicate that what is going to follow is the "announcement" that "this" was referring to.
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Mon 22 Jan, 2018 11:38 am
@Carrieeee,
Carl, after 'true' I'd'a used ':' 'steada ';'--like Lay sez

Maybe 'that' 'steada 'the'
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