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hbg2017
 
Reply Thu 21 Dec, 2017 12:48 pm
Could someone good at English please help check if my Paragraph below are grammatical and understandable? Which one is, which one is not?


President Trump announced on 6 December that he order to the us embassy moving from Tel Aviv to Jerusalem, his decision not surprising for the Middle east expert, when Trump appointment son in law Jared Kushner for the us envoy for peace in middle east, it clear that president trump has not impartially viewpoint about Palestine and Israel conflict. because Jared Kushner and his family always was Israel fans in Washington and he can't playing in Palestine and Israel conflict as neutral envoy.
 
jespah
 
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Reply Thu 21 Dec, 2017 01:47 pm
@hbg2017,
You mean sentences, not paragraphs. A paragraph is a group of related sentences.

No. This is not grammatically correct. There are problems with nearly every word.

Quote:
President Trump announced on 6 December that he order to the us embassy moving from Tel Aviv to Jerusalem, his decision not surprising for the Middle east expert, when Trump appointment son in law Jared Kushner for the us envoy for peace in middle east, it clear that president trump has not impartially viewpoint about Palestine and Israel conflict. because Jared Kushner and his family always was Israel fans in Washington and he can't playing in Palestine and Israel conflict as neutral envoy.


1) Almost the entire set of words is one big run-on sentence because the only places you end sentences are the period at the end and the one after the word 'conflict'. Commas do not end sentences. You can use a period, an exclamation point, or a question mark. So it has to be split.
2) Your verb tenses don't agree. Announced is past tense; order is not. Because this happened in the past, every verb probably should be in past tense.
3) At least in American English, we don't write 6 December. We would say December the 6th or the 6th of December. British English differs. You need to specify which kind of English you're trying to write in.
4) 'His decision not surprising' is incomplete. You mean 'his decision was not surprising'.
5) Middle East is capitalized, always, both words, no matter where it comes in a sentence.
6) Same with US if you're abbreviating United States, and President Trump. If you are referring to the president and not using the word as a title, then it can be lower case. But as a title, it is always capitalized.
7) 'The Middle East expert' - who is this? Is it more than one person? If it is, then the word expert needs to become plural -> experts.
8) 'It clear' is incomplete. You mean 'it is clear'.
9) 'has not impartially viewpoint' doesn't make sense in English. Do you mean 'does not have an impartial viewpoint'? 'Impartially' is an adverb; it modifies adjectives or verbs, not nouns.
10) The second sentence 'because ...' must start with a capital letter.

There are more but I don't have the time to get into them.

I get the basic gist of what you want to say, but this is far from being grammatically correct in English.
hbg2017
 
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Reply Sat 23 Dec, 2017 04:58 am
@jespah,
@jespah
Thank you.

hbg2017
 
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Reply Sat 23 Dec, 2017 05:01 am
@hbg2017,
Is it good?

President Trump made the announcement on December 6 and he ordered to the US embassy be moved from Tel Aviv to Jerusalem.
The decision was not surprising for the Middle East experts.
When Donald Trump has appointed his son- in- law, Jared Kushner as a the US envoy for peace in Middle East.
It is clear that Jared Kushner was not expected to have an impartial view on Israel-Palestinian conflict.
Because Jared Kushner and his family are always recognized as Israel fanatic follower.
Trump's decision will have political repercussion on Palestinian behavior.
jespah
 
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Reply Sat 23 Dec, 2017 06:15 am
@hbg2017,
It's better.

But seriously, it looks like you're just throwing English words around, hoping they're correct. It doesn't look like you're actually learning the rules.

  • When you hyphenate words, you don't keep a space. So you write singer-songwriter, not singer- songwriter
  • Starting a sentence with the word 'because' usually results in a fragment and not a complete thought. Not always - but the word 'because' is a response to the question 'why'. Usually you keep the reasoning together. It's a dependent clause.
  • The verb tenses still aren't lining up. Do you know the differences between present and past tense, and how to show them in English?
  • Plurals are still not being shown properly. Do you know how to show a plural in English, and where it's coming from?
  • Short words like 'and', 'the', and 'has' are not being used correctly. Have you been taught conjunctions, articles, and basic verb forms?
  • The idiom 'political repercussions' isn't correct in your writing. We don't just add that last S for fun. We add it for a reason. Do you know what it is?


I'm sorry, but I am not an English teacher and I do not have the time to continue giving you so much help. I have no doubt I wouldn't do half as well in your language; please don't take this as an insult or a dismissal of your efforts. It's more that I can tell you're not being taught well at all, and that's kind of sad.
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